It is now 12:25 am on 30 Sept. Whoever participate in Group#3's activity after this moment will not be counted.

peer review

hi! i like peer review because it gives chance to know other people's idea. i use to do lot of peer review when i was in the CESL. i learn a lot from peer review. peer review is helpfull for me because i can know other people's writing styles, mistkes , good points and negetive point too. it gives idea to make our essay strong. of course we also learn english vocabilary. in the peer review, i would like to discuss section with partner. it is good to discuss about our essay because we cannot find our mistake than other. we also able to know good sides about our essay. for example: my partner told me you have good imagination about your topics. you used personal expiriances too. it makes your essay strong and more intersting. he also told me my "hook" gives more ideas about topics. i think, i would like to focus on thesis statment and concultion paregraph. every person has differnt ideas about all the topics. if i have to rate peer review expiriance i would like to give 5/5 score. peer review also helps to improve reading skills and speaking skills. i really enjoy peer review activity. i hope, we can do more peer review which helps to improve writing skill.

Source of the essay!!

Sorry!! I forgot to put the source of the essay that I chose.
http://www.wiredprof.com/100/SampleEssays/expository/expository1.htm

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BLOG ACTIVITY from Blog Master!!

Hello, everyone!!

I'm really sorry that it took time to put on this on our blog.
I changed the article and also rule a little bit, so please read them carefully.

By the way, our friend, Orphan needs YOUR HELP!
Actually since our classes have started, Orphan has never participated in our classes because of the tennis tournaments, and he came back today!!
So, could you guys teach him what we have learned as so far…!!??

First, please read the essays as the below.
Next, I want you all guys to find and point out only 1 question out of 9 questions that you choose from...

(From 1 paragraph)
1,Introduction?
2,Thesis Statement?
3,Transition(1)?

(From 2 paragraph)
4,Topic sentence?
5,Transition(2)?

(From 3 paragraph)
6,Topic sentence?

(From 4 paragraph)
7,Topic sentence?

(From 5 paragraph)
8,conclusion?
9,Transition(3)?


Attention!!

・Please answer only 1 question.
・You can pick up the quesion that you want to answer.
・However, please choose and answer the quetion except one that the other friends already do.




Television: the Undiscovered Drug

①After a long, hard day of school and work, I trudge up the stairs to my apartment. As I approach the door, I can already hear the mumbles of the television. I open the door and am not surprised to see my sister on the couch, hand on remote, flipping through channels. I am now accustomed to this picture. My sister could be crowned couch potato queen. She watches television day and night--so much that my cousins and I now refer to her as the Human TV Guide. She knows what's on at a specific time on a specific channel. She has the channels of different stations of different areas memorized. She could tell you what channel MTV is in Torrance. She could tell you what channel USA is in Rowland Heights. She could tell you what channel TNT is in Fullerton. My sister has memorized practically everything there is to know about television. (1) , she has difficulty memorizing the multiplication table, all due to the effects of watching television endlessly. Television has had a detrimental effect on many youths.
②Television has dulled the mind of an average youth. Youths today is used to having their information passed to them on a silver platter. Not as many youths like to read anymore because it involves too much work. My sister hates to read, not only because there are words involved in that activity, but also because it is now impossible for her to visualize the world presented within the book. It is(2) impossible for her to focus on a book because of the short attention span she has developed, and reading books just takes too much time for her. Television presents the world to her, a different world every thirty minutes, which holds her attention. This now leaves her no mental work to do, except to decide which channel she would like to watch. Because watching television requires no mental work, the brains of the adolescents that watch television are not stimulated enough. This may lead to a slower learning process, which would then explain my sister’s inability to memorize the multiplication table.
③Television consumes time youths should be dedicating to more important and more essential things in their lives. Television takes away time that should be devoted to homework. When my sister gets home from school, she will immediately flip the television on, leaving her homework for later. When she finally decides to do her homework, the television will remain on, and she will sit on the couch with her books propped up in front of her, giving it only half of her attention. Homework takes longer to complete, and it probably will not be her best work since only half of her concentration was focused on it. Television also takes time away from quality family time. Most adolescents do not have a strong family connection. Families whose only time together is at the dinner table will waste precious quality time with their heads turned towards the television. The youth of today lose the strong morals and values they can get when spending time with their family. Television can even take away time from friends. When I spend time with my friends, I like to talk with them or go out. When my sister spends time with her friends, they spend the whole day watching the television. Their conversation revolves around what they are watching on the television. Most teens have the majority of their day devoted to the television.
④Television has exposed a world of violence, drugs, and sexual immorality to our youth, causing them to be apathetic towards these issues. Many television shows have made at least one of the three aspects, violence, drugs, and sexual immorality, a normalcy. The Simpsonsis a show that is enjoyed by many teens. This show depicts violence as something comedic. Regularly, in this show, the father chokes his son at least once, and the children watch a cartoon show called Itchy and Scratchy, in which a cat and mouse try to kill each other. Our youths today find this violence funny. When they encounter violence in real life, they do not consider it serious because they experience it everyday on the television. Characters in television shows such as Married with Children smoke, and although there are commercials advertising against smoking more than ever, smoking on the television gives our youths a different message. This advertises for the cigarette companies for practically free. In The Drew Carey Show, all the main characters spend their free time in a bar drinking. They even make and sell their very own beer. Cheers is another show that advocates drinking. Most of the show takes place in a bar. These characters in television shows have influence on our youth. Sexual immorality has also become common, which is exemplified by a show called Friends. Friends depicts each of their characters as people who sleep around. Sex is an integrated part of their lives and is expected when any one of the characters have a significant other. Undeclared revolves around college life in which college students have sex with each other “just for fun.” Adolescents of today model their behavior after characters like these who live in worlds of violence, drugs and sexual immorality, and they do not realize that what they are doing is wrong because to our youth, whatever they see and hear on television is right.
⑤When television was first invented, its purpose was to bring the family together and perhaps present a way in which we could receive information faster. In modern times, the television has managed to affect our youth in ways we would not have imagined. The family gathering concept has disappeared. We have accomplished a faster way to transmit information, (3) it was a little too much information a little too fast for the wrong audience. Television has taken over our way of life and we must stop the effects it has had on our youths and our society before it is too late.

BLOG ACTIVITY

Hi, dear classmates! We have a task for you.
Pick one of the careers we gave you below, then imagine that you are an expert in that field and you need to say someting about your career. Write one paragraph, and do not forget to include the elements of paragraphs that we have learned in class (e.g. topic sentence, examples and thesis statement)

Rules:
-Write your paragraph so that it contains all of elements listed below:
(General statment)
(Limited background information)
(Thesis statment of intent)

Notes:
- Each career can be used ONLY one time, so if you like one career take it before somebody else!
-Your paragraph has to be at least 100 words.
-You have to finish this activity by Tuesday midnight.


To make your work easier. We provided you with a random paragraphs as examples:
(this is how your paragraph should look like)

Vitamin D Deficiency
Vitamin D is the sunshine vitamin, and Vitamin D is essential for good health. [General statement, engages the reader] Until the twentieth century, however, little was known about this important vitamin, and people who lived in temperate climates tended to suffer every winter from the lack of Vitamin D. Even today, although knowledge about Vitamin D has been available for more than fifty years, many people still suffer from Vitamin D deficiencies. [Limited background information] This essay will describe the chemical makeup of Vitamin D, the group of disease called “rickets” that afflict people who are deficient in this vitamin, and solutions to avoid such deficiencies. [Thesis statement of intent]

- Saleh Saeed, United Arab Emirates

Small Town Relationships in El Salvador
Almost all of the small towns in El Salvador are similar in their general appearance. [General, engaging] In addition, many of the people who live in these towns have a special lifestyle. In contrast to life in the larger cities, people in small towns share many cultural things and experiences. [Limited background information] This unusual sharing contributes to a familial relationship among neighbors. [Thesis statement of intent/opinion]
- Rita Saravia, El Salvador

Source: Sample introductions taken from Joy M. Reid’s The Process of Composition. P. 84 – 85.

You can write a paragraph wich describes following careers:
1. Dentist
2. Travel guide
3. Photographer
4. Personal trainer
5. Pilot
6. Politician
7. Bank consultant
8. Elementary school teacher
9. Restaurant manager
10. Journalist of Cars magazine
11. Interior Designer
12. Lawyer

HAVE FUN!!!

Reminder

Hi Everyone,

Just want to remind you that we are having class in the LMC tomorrow. Bring you first draft printed to class!

See you!
Miranda

Obsession Silmwaist in China

As time goes on, humans may change their mind to request beauty constantly. In China, people liked thin women first in the Han Dynasty, and about 400 years along, people like married with fat women in the Tang Dynasty; and then they liked thin women again until now; moreover, they chase more specific place, such as waist. More and more men wanted their wives have silmwaist in the Han Dynasty because their emperor like it, so that women started pursue of silmwaist. The reason is ancient China is male chauvinism country; therefore, men like what that women will be the same. Although lots of women want to build their better waist quickly, the body-building is not one or two days work. As that’s result, women start to build their waist in an extremely way, three days only eaten one meal and use a bell to tighten their waist. It is really bad for women’s health, but no one wanted to stop because it is beauty to them. Although time is changed completely, China is a fair and freedom country. But the trend is still there recently. Women still want to be silmwaist, so they use a lot of method, such as medicines, plastic or some other terrible ways. Therefore, the silmwaist is the popular obsession since ancient to modern time in China, no matter it is harmful or not, women still want to do that.

Padaung's beauty

People need beauty but it must be a healthy beauty that doesn't hurt your body or change your natural growth. I will talk about the Padaung which is a minority that live in the northern Thailand. This Padaung are keeping its language and tradition. They think the females who have a long neck are very beautiful, so they start to wear the copper collar to fit closely their neck and add one more follow their age growth up to the twenty five years old. Due to the weighth of copper collar from five to ten kilogram, females' shoulder are forced down and their neck will appear long. It's obvious that changing natural growth for beauty will cause a lot of serious injury such as bleeding of attrition from the hard copper collar. It's said that it will endanger females' life if they take away the copper collar from their neck after their twenty five years old. People can seek beauty but it's not means that they need devote body damage or life to obtain beauty.

What is the rough draft?

Hi everyone,

We will write our introduction and outline together in class on Monday. So, on Wed 9/23, you have to hand in your outline together with anything you have written so far for your essay. The complete first draft is due on Fri (9/25)

Once again...
What is due on 9/23 (W)? = outline + anything you written (worth 5%)
What is due on 9/25 (F)? = The COMPLETE first draft of your essay (worth 45%)

See you tomorrow!
Miranda

The hazard of eye surgery

The extreme beauty may be dangerous to our body. Sometimes people purse the ultimate beauty at the sacrifice of themselves with a lot of money in order to look themselves more beautiful and attractive. In my country, Japan, there are a lot of people who pay a big amount of money for being beauty and result in hurting themselves unexpectedly. It is natural to think that everybody wants to be splendiferous but sometimes people cannot judge correctly and lose their own way. Now, I’m going to introduce one of the examples that surely happen to us now in Japan. Have you ever heard of the word, “Lasic eye surgery”? Actually, “Lasic” is short for “laser-assisted in-situ keratomileusis” in Greek. It means that modifying the horny cornea with laser. This “Lasic eye surgery” is a procedure that tries to recover people’s eyesights, reducing or eliminating the need for eyeglasses or contanct lens. This surgery has been started from the United States at first and spread into Japan also. Recently, Japanese people are getting this surgery in order to make thier appearance look better. Because they don't have to wear glasses anymore. However, it is also the fact that the number of people who have big problems in their eyes after the surgery has been increasing.

Announcements:

Hi everyone,

If you have noticed from our class schedule, you are supposed to bring your rough draft of your essay to class. Since I know a lot of you are still working on your topic, I will postphone the date to Wednesday 23rd. So, remember to bring the rough draft of your essay to class on 9/23,Wed. The 1st draft (worth 45%) is due on 9/23 (Friday).

Also, Group #2 please email me to make an appointment.

Wish you are having a great weekend,
Miranda

Those who didn't get a comment from me because their paragraphs are not related to a kind of extreme beauty practice, please write your paragraphs again and upload them to the blog before Monday. - Miranda

ACTIVITY 2 from blogmaster

Hi, dear Ling101 classmates. We need your help!!!

There is an article about traffic rules. It is so interesting that Natsumi gave it to Bostin and asked him to post it on our blog. However, lazy Bostin typed it forgetting the transitional expressions and missed the original one. Can you help us to correct it?

The 2nd, 3rd, 5th and 6th paragraphs miss transitional expressions (such as also, however, and in conclusion). Copy a sentence and add transitional expression(s) properly. Each student has to put two expressions at least. You have to finish posting by Monday midnight.


Example:
3rd-1) So why does most of the world travel on the right side today?



+++++What is “transitional expressions”?+++++
Check your HANDOUT we got on 4th September!

Why Don't We All Drive on the Same Side of the Road?

1. Residents of Samoa are bracing for chaos this month as the Pacific island nation becomes the first country in decades to order motorists to start driving on the opposite side of the road. On the morning of Sept. 7, drivers will switch from the right side of the street — where about two-thirds of the world's traffic moves — to the left, in order to open the nation to low-cost used autos from left-driving Australia and New Zealand. It will mark the world's first road switch since Ghana, Nigeria and Sierra Leone changed sides in the 1970s, and one of the only instances of switching from the right to the left; virtually every other change has been the reverse. Worried about increased accidents, tens of thousands of Samoans have protested the plan. As a Samoan lawyer opposed to the switch told the Times of London, "Cars are going to crash, people are going to die, not to mention the huge expense to our small country."
2. 1) It remains a curiosity and a bit of a historical mystery why the world is divided over something as basic as which side of the road to drive on. 2) The fact that most people are right-handed has a lot to do with it; for much of history, travelers have stuck to the left. 3) Ancient Romans using chariots are believed to have held the reins with their right hands and a whip with their left; to avoid whipping oncoming drivers, they favored the left-hand side of the road (called "left-hand traffic"). 4) It's easier for right-handers to mount a horse from the left, so riders gravitated to that side to avoid oncoming traffic as they climbed on and off. 5) Knights and other armed travelers favored the left so they could do battle, if necessary, with their good hand.
3. 1) Why does most of the world travel on the right side today? 2) Theories differ, there's no doubt Napoleon was a major influence. 3) The French have used the right at least the late 18th century (there's evidence of a Parisian "keep-right" law dating to 1794). 4) Some say that before the French Revolution, aristocrats drove their carriages on the left, forcing the peasantry to the right. 5) Amid the upheaval, fearful aristocrats sought to blend in with the proletariat by traveling on the right. 6) Regardless of the origin, Napoleon brought right-hand traffic to the nations he conquered, Russia, Switzerland and Germany. Hitler, ordered right-hand traffic in Czechoslovakia and Austria in the 1930s. 7)Nations that escaped right-handed conquest, Great Britain, preserved their left-handed tradition.
4. The U.S. has not always been a nation of right-hand drivers; earlier in its history, carriage and horse traffic traveled on the left, as it did in England. But by the late 1700s, the theory goes, teamsters driving large wagons pulled by several pairs of horses began prompting a shift to the right. A driver would sit on the rear left horse in order to wield his whip with his right hand; to see opposite traffic clearly, the teamsters traveled on the right.
5. 1) One of the final moves to firmly standardize traffic directions in the U.S. occurred in the 20th century, when Henry Ford decided to mass-produce his cars with controls on the left (one reason, stated in a 1908 catalog: the convenience for passengers exiting directly onto the curb, "especially ... if there is a lady to be considered"). 2) These norms were set, many countries eventually adjusted to conform to the right-hand standard, Canada in the 1920s, Sweden in 1967 and Burma in 1970. 3) The U.K. and former colonies Australia and India are among the Western world's few remaining holdouts. 4) Several Asian nations, Japan, use the left— a possible legacy of samurai warriors who wore their swords on their left and didn't want to bump anyone — though many places use both right-hand-drive and left-hand-drive cars.
6. 1) Widespread opposition to the changeover in Samoa, the government insists it's prepared for the move. 2) Officials have added road humps to slow traffic and, the Wall Street Journal, set up a training area near a sports stadium where people can practice driving on the flip side. 3) Sept. 7 and 8 have been declared national holidays to help people ease into the new law. Leau Apisaloma, a village chief, told the Journal there's no cause for alarm: "it will be hard, but we'll learn — we're not stupid."
   

By RANDY JAMES, TIME (Saturday, Sep. 05, 2009)

The Word that you come up with MUST be related to HALLOWEEN!!!!!!

Hello I'm sure that you are exciting to know what our activities are here an interesting game we choose the topic for it which is

"Halloween"


step 1: I'll choose one alphabet step 2: the first player needs to give me one word which start with that alphabet step 3: he/she has to write a sentence which includes that word "look easy ! " step 4: Finally, this player need to choose another alphabet for to the next player

the second player need to Step 4: Check the sentence written by the first player and correct the mistakes if there is any Step 5: Come up with a word that start with the alphabet that the previous player gives. Repeat step 2 & 3

The next players need to do the same steps
Rules and conditions:
1. The sentence must not be too short. (more that 8 words, we don't count articles and prepositions as a word) 2. The word that you come up must be a verb,a noun,an adjective, or an adverb) 3.In case of two or more people working on the same alphabet, we will take the sentence that is posted first. If you find that someone has already posted a sentence before you, you have to work on another alphabet. 4. The sentence must be related to the theme Halloween.
Example

Basmah gives the letter G The 1st player ‘s answer: The word is Gothic The sentence: I bought gothic dress as my halloween costume Then he/she choose letter R The 2nd player needs to correct the sentence first Revised sentence: “I bought A gothic dress as my halloween costume” then repeat step 2, 3, 4 Mary gives the letter R

Now let's start The letter is T




The Word that you come up with MUST be related to HALLOWEEN!!!!!!

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2nd one
http://www.getonmyspace.com/Images/Myspace_Halloween_Comments/Cute_Halloween_Comments/images/Cute_Halloween_Comment_10.gif

TRIBAL MARKS

These are marks on the face of people in africa usually used for identity, It shows what tribe the person is from, different tribes have there different tribal marks. It is ussually done when the person is an infant, it is done with a kind of hot knife that is used to to cut the face of the person, the cut is quite deep so that it does not cover up and it remains permanent. tribal marks where used in the olden days to identify people. It was a sort of cultural thing.

by Sufi

In Saudi Arabia, women have different ways to show their beauty. one of the most common thing is Henna, which is similar to tattoo but it is temporary. Henna is a natural plant and it has many benefits for the human. many people wonder how to make this plant to be like tattoo, it's simply by dry the leafs ,then crush it, and mix it with water and some other stuffs that can found in every home. also, Henna is a symbol of happiness, the women used to use Henna in weddings and parties, but the bride must use it in her weddings day as a traditional habit. there is also other use for Henna which is dying the hair with different colors, not only for style but to get the benefits from the plant.

modestness is so beautiful

in the long chinese history, modestness has played an indispensabal part.in chinese people'eyes, modestness is so beautiful. the modestness is to the people what perfume is to the flowers. the meaning of modestness in chinese is honor, a attitude of life and a way to calm their restless with anxiety.chinese like hide their successful and conservative.they think that modest men is the most successful one. as a chinese proverb, modesty helps one go forward, whereas conceit makes one lag behind.

It is now 2am on 9/18, Friday.
Credits will NOT be given to paragraphs that are posted after this moment.
However, you are still welcome to post your paragraph for comment within today.

The words' magic

The extreme beauty may be established from just the words. According to "Inès Marie Laetitia Eglantine Isabelle de Seignard de la Fressange" who is the one of the fashion models and also fashion designers from French, just only seven magical words can make women change into beautiful. She usually teaches this magic to women before moving over to their outer modifications because she regards this as the basic component for women to be beautiful. She is so famous for having turned out a lot of super models including Japanese women to the world so far that she is known to the most of the Japanese now. She puts emphasis on making them have confidence from changing from thier inside rather than modifying their appearance. She surely believes in the power of words that can give every women in the world opportunities to be attaractive.

By Miku

Atypical Fashion

The extremely beauty happened on Each time quantum in each country. Recently, lots of teens who were born after 90’s in China are focus on atypical fashion. The person who wear light pink or yellow shirt, big size jeans, a very huge sunglass; and make up a lot; and speak some words that they called ET language will be called atypical fashion. Those are not only the reasons that atypical fashion teens looks like; moreover, their thinking and movement are very strange and complex to understand. Many researchers want to find out the answer why those teens are going to be atypical fashion people. Until now, there is no completely idea to show the reason. Basically, atypical fashion teens grew up in a family which parents were born after 70’s; those parents did not have enough experience to train and teach their children. so that the teens have a different environment to people who were born after 80’s. and more reasons that why they want to be an atypical fashion person because they want to surpass other people who are not in their group; they want to be unique and special. In fact, it are not formal. however, it is a trend and became popular in China. Lots of people are force in that and enjoy it. It seems that it could not be a problem. it is really in trend and should be formus. moreover, it has to be called a fashion style.

face surgery

hi! people are spending millions of dollar to looks beautiful or handsame. today, plastic suregry is the one of source to extime beauty practice. plastic suregry isthe another name of changeing your body, skin, bone etc. face suregry is the one of popular around the world. you can chnge your skin color, mouth, nose, etc. you could be become more handsome or beautiful. as we know, everybody want to have nice body and face too. plastic suegry can help to improve your persanality. movie stars are using plasic suregry to give different look of their body. i believe, plastic suregry is most successful extrime beauty practic then others beauty practic. it gives very fast result then others prctice too.

Tattoos and piercings have been used in civilizations long ago and still continue today in the 21st century as an extreme beauty practice every where. These practices have been used to explain alot of things. Tattoos have been used for spritual connection or as a connection to someone who has passed away, but also as a connection to something that means so much to someone. Tattoos and piercings have also been used as a terror or intimination tactic to scare society but according to these people it signifies beauty and as a belonging to some terror groups such as gangs, biker clubs, and also some old civilizations used these to mark such things as killings, victories, or as a tribute to someone who they admire for their skills as warriors. There are many different ways to signify these kinds of things and they show to the world in all kinds of ways such as face tattoos, face piercings, full body art, and also on genitalias. Some cultures consider this the ultimate extreme beauty practice as you will see in life today and in the past. Tattoos and piercing have appear to also be the most used beauty practice of today.

- by New American Gospel

Male plastic surgery

Extreme beauty practices are very old, some stayed unchanged through history,some developed, but there are also some new practices like plastic surgery. Most people think that only women do plastic surgeries and silicone implants, but today things are changing. Every day more and more men do plastic surgeries, main cause of this change is that men are realizing that looking young and fit is very important in today`s society. To get in good shape and look fit, we need some time and effort, and we all know that time is the most valued thing today, so plastic surgeries look like logical solution. Studies proved that people who look fit have more confidence and success in life.We all know about simple surgeries for man as face lifting, botox, hair adding, but today men can use surgeries to get perfectly shaped muscles using silicone implants, so to look good today you just need some money and not that much time.

by Orhan Spahic

Eating disorder

Eating disorder is one of the problems resulted from extreme beauty. Many young girls all over the world especially in developing countries are suffering from it. Of course Japan is not exception. Though the symptom of eating disorder is mainly classified into two kinds; bulimia (overeating) and anorexia (lack or loss of appetite for food), the basic attitude is the same. They are afraid of being fat abnormally. Most young girls, even little girls in elementary school believe in a “myth” that being thin is virtue and getting fat is sin. Media is involved into creating the myth deeply. “How to diet” is a popular topic in women’s magazines. Surprisingly, magazines for children also deal with this topic. They imprint the value to little girls. Increase of the number of eating disorder patients in Japan must be caused by forcing a biased value.

Beauty and two styles

What is beautiful? It’s a complicated question and every person has their own standards to judge the beauty. However, we have a basic concept and define beauty as that which brings enjoyment to the person who looks or contemplates. When you see a beautiful subject, you would like to acquaint it and interested in it. For example, you will choose the best beautiful notebook you think when you want to buy a notebook. Also, it could be a beautiful person. So, beauty can be used to describe a person or a thing. Then, I will tell you that there are two styles of beauty. One is natural beauty and another one is artificial beauty. Natural beauty is defined as looking great without enhancement. For example, one person gets up in the morning and spends less time to make up and just show enough tidy appearance. Unlike the super model, the person in natural beauty doesn’t need to spend hours dealing with hair, clothing and make-up. From above example, we can see the meaning of artificial beauty is opposite to the natural beauty and it explains that it’s necessary to do something to change the original appearance. Nevertheless, we can’t say that which is better between these two styles of beauty. We only can express that you need to undertake no more than you can perform when you choose any style of beauty. The most important point is that you should choose the suitable way for you to make yourself beauty.

the extreme beauty in old days china

I wanna talk about some of the aspects that how people define the phrase “extreme beauty” in china. China used to be one of the man-dominated countries, and the men would not like the women to be taller than them. As the man thought that if a woman is short that is extremely beauty at that time, the whole society accepts it as a common sense, which means the woman who is tall hard to get married. But situation has been totally changed nowadays. In the modern society, people think that the taller a girl is, the sexier the girl is. During the Tang Dynasty, people thought that fat is an aspect of extreme beauty for woman. As the king of Tang dynasty called Xuanzong Tang has a favorite imperial concubine whose name is Yuhuan Yang, and she is a really fat woman. But fashion today trends to prefer skinny girls much more than fat girls.

Dear everyone,

I know you are confused with what I wanted you to do for your first essay. Apparently, the topic that I asked you to brainstorm earlier doesn't match with the prompt. I apologize for the confusion. Please stick to the assignment prompt and think of one extreme beauty practice that you want to write about.

I am on my way back. See you soon!
Miranda

There has been lots of controversy over whether marijuana can be used for medicinal purposes or if it has no real purpose. There are some uses for marijuana for physical and emotional problems. It can help with physical problems such as cancer(Increasing appetite), eating disorders, arthritis, and nausea. There are also emotional aspects that it can help too such as people who have severe anger or depression problems. These are several reasons why it has been tried to become legal to sell medical marijuana. The people who suffer from these problems can have a little pain reliever if they smoke these hybrids that are made for certain problems. There is also a healthy way to actually inhale the THCs in the buds by using a device called a vaporizer which is very safe and had almost no effect on the lungs. The use of medical marijuana should be legal because it does help and it can be used safely using the right tools and devices.

by Jeff Gaston

My topic is soccer

Soccer is my favorite sport in my life. I will be through watching and playing to introduce that soccer is part of my life. First, I watched soccer when I was young. I really like those superstars and clubs. When I watched superstars had a good performance in the yard, I was really dreaming that I would be them in the future. when I watched my best club AC Milan had a bad performance in the league, I was so sad. It is to say that soccer is the important part of my life. Second, I also can get fun from playing soccer. I can use the soccer skills which is studied from watching these superstars to help my team overcome diverticulitis and win the champion. So I have to say that my life without soccer as the world without sun. It is a part of my life.

by Evan Tu

roofs shapes

Architecture is the field that design the building. in this area everything that the architects choose it to be in the design means something such as roofs shapes and materials. all these choice based on the purpose of the building and the weather. in the cold areas around the world, usually the building have the Gable roofs which look like triangle; this type of roofs, they use it to allow the snow fall down from the top. the other common type of roofs is the flat one. this type is horizontal or almost, it has a very small slop to slid the water from the top. this kind mostly use in the hot climate areas. Also, the houses that had the flat roof, have more space inside and outside the house. in concluding, architecture is a very wide field and it has many roles to apply it in designing.

the relationship between music and psychology

I just take the psychology course and music course during the first semester of my freshman year. And as I make up a research about factors effecting human emotions, I just find out that the music do effect us a lot through our life time. The instructor of my psychology course told us that the environment could effect and then change human behavior through many ways. One of those ways is media which include television, radio, etc. And music is definitely a crucial part of all kinds of media. So how actually music effect our emotions & behaviors? Firstly, through the rhythm. In the music class, the instructor said that there ar different instruments which have different tone color that could be dark, brightly, or sth else. When we listen to different music, we will be effected by kinds of rhythm naturally since we were born. Some will make us happy, but some can't be tolerated. Secondly, through the lyrics which include some hints of language and culture. Lyrics is a way to express the feeling of the singer, and also could remind the memory of the same experiences that the audience endured. So lyrics will effect us through the way that language and culture do. thats all what I mean 2 talk about..

Bread

When, where and how bread was born? Bread is one of the oldest food. It date back to Neolithic era. Their bread was different from ours. Though bread we eat today is fermented using yeast, theirs is not. Ferment makes bread soft and delicious, so that their bread was hard and dry. Big change happened in BC5500. In Egipt, someone left bread dough in high temperature. Then wild ferment adhered on it accidentally and it fermented. He just tried baking it and found it better than theirs. After this happening, fermented bread spread all around Europe.

success

hi! success is the important for all of us. Success comes to to think different than other or doing different than others. There are number f quality require to become success. First, success is another name of hard work and persistence even we pass difficult time. Successful people never do different things, but they do things differently. We can go back our history it proves that success comes to any age. It requires strong desire, hard-work and having ambition. For example, thomas Alva Edition who find electric bulb. He failed 1000 times, but in a end he get success. so, failure is the simply opportunity to start with more inteligancy. succes makes you famous around the world.

Chinese food

Chinese food is becoming a globally food those years; there are several Chinese restraints in many countries; however, is it really Chinese traditional food? For example, America has American Chinese food, the taste is more sweet than traditional Chinese food, and also it cooks very faster and easier because it is can be more similar than fast food in America. However, Chinese food is more focus on four types of dish. First, Chinese food considers the material which is good for human health. And then, it must be colorful and the smile must be perfect. And last one the more important one is taste. Chinese food focuses on the taste; we have lots of different seasoning to cook different dishes, such as Sichuan red paper is more hot and spicy; Shanghai’s seasoning is sweeter; and Northeast part of China’s soy sauce is more salt. Therefore, Chinese traditional food is so complex to cook and so delicious to eat by a long time history. It must be better than American Chinese food or something else.

Drinking

Do you know the differences of drinking alcohol regulations on all over the world? Every country has its own rules for drinking. Now, I want to compare the two countries between the China and US and tell some differences from them. In China, there is no limitation for children to buy and drink alcohol. When I was 10 years old, my father asked me to buy a dozen of beer for party. I went to the store and easily bought the beer without any permission from any person. However, in US, children are not allowed to buy and drink alcohol. If children who are not meet the ledge age drink alcohol in US, they will be punished by some ways. So, we can see a big difference between these two countries. Children can buy and drink alcohol at any time in China but not in US.

Dan Dong

Important Announcement:

Dear students,

I will be leaving for home on Sept 7 (Mon) for my grandfather's funernal, and I won't be back until Sept 15 (Tue). During my absence, Ms. Rhiannon O'Neal and Ms. Tzu-Shan Chang will come to conduct the classes.

The following are some details that you have to pay attention to:

Attendence will be taken, so please make sure you come to class AS USUAL. Neither Ms.O'Neal or Ms.Chang will give out the color papers, but please follow their instructions and be engaging in class as you always were. Also, please make sure to finish the worksheets and tasks assigned in class.

On Wednesday, Ms. O'Neal will put you into groups. These groups will then take turn to be the blogmaster of the class.

Group 1:Basmah, Natsumi, Botian
Group 2:Saleh, Miki, Orhan
Group 3:Dan, Krunal, Sufiyanu
Group 4: Angelina,Jeff,Jianghao

For Friday's class, please stick to our inital plan and go to the Language Media (Faner 1125) Center for class.

ATTENTION - Group 1
(Bashmah, Natsumi, Botian) - Please start to plan for the two blog activities that you want to post for next week on 9/18 (Fri). These activites can be related to expository writing, paragraph development, or mechanics (e.g grammar or sententence structure). Also, I would like to meet with you on 9/16 (Wed) to talk about your plan, so please send me an email (miranda_ma@ymail.com) me to make an appointment.

I appreciate your consideration for my absence and thank you for co-operating with me and the two instructors.

If you have anything to ask me concerning this class, you are welcome to email me. I will also keep checking our classblog, you are encouraged to post entries on the blog to keep me posted about your progress.

I will see you in a week!

Regards,
Miranda Ma

(P.S. The blog activity posted on 9/5 has to be finished on 9/8, Tue)

The following sentences are extracted from your first journal. They all need revision to some extent.

Choose five of the following sentences, rewrite them, and give explanation to the revised sentences. You can talk about issues that you can see concerning mechanics (grammar, punctuations, & spelling), sentence structure, or overall meaning of the sentence.

[This activity should be finished on or before Tuesday, 9/8. Don’t forget to include your name in your comment entry]

1. in the future, If i have to write about any topic, I'll read about it in the beginning, then If I have some questions, I'll try to answer them to help me understanding clearly, after that I'll try to find some one has more knowledge than me and let him help me answering the questions, to get correct thought and facts, because it is important to write with real information.

2. Someone asked me, do you think it is useful to you learning English in CESL(English as second language center). I said yes, it is really useful to me. It not only helps me improve my English skills, and also gives me such enough confidence that I can really enjoy the collage life.

3. When I have trouble and get a poor solution, I will seek the reason why I fail to resolve this problem by writing. I prefer to write mood diary because I can improve my mood by writing and nobody can see.

4. Sometimes it can be pretty hard in the pre-writing stage just trying to generate ideas and not have a boring paper that people won’t like to read.

5. Sometime, I get information online websites about my topics. It is also good techniques to start pre- writing.

6. I have not written papers in English very much so far. I should be used to express what I want to say in English. To solve my problem, keeping journals seems suitable. It will help me to write papers more freely and in relax.

7. So, I believe that freewriting let me free from pressure coming from being afraid of thinking too much or making mistakes when I write essays.

8. . When the writer shows his feeling infreestyle writing he is able to stop thinking and make mistakes without judgment. Also he is able to misspell be imperfect. Finally, freestyle helps people to express their feeling in their own
way.

9. We then looked at free writing, this is a sort of technique that you just write whatever you feel like writing, it helps you improve your writing skills it makes you more fluent in writing, and then also looked at focus free writing which is practically this same thing as free writing but here you have something to focus on, you are writing about something, that is a particular topic here.

10. Most of the time, I’d like to draw a visualized cluster. It helps me to clarify ideas that are in my mind, and at the same time it helps showing that the connections between different ideas that I have, creating a reasonable article.

11. Brainstorming makes our writing very easy and smooth rather than using other techniques. For instant, I need to write essay about California condor than first I need to go online and find information about condor like population, problems with condor, how useful for human being etc.

Assignments for the weekend:
I. Become part of the class blog community
Step 1: Set up a Gmail account (http://mail.google.com/) (Make sure you jot down
user ID and password!)
Step 2: Send your Gmail address to (miranda_ma@ymail.com)
Once I get your Gmail, I will invite you as one of the authors of the
class blog.
Step 3: Check your Gmail account and accept the invitation.


II. Our first blog assignment/discussion will be posted on 9/5 (Sat). Read the instructions of the assignment very carefully and post your answer as a comment. All comments should be posted by Tuedsay. (MAKE SURE TO PUT YOUR NAME DOWN!)

Welcome 101ers! Are you ready to start blogging?